The gruesome discovery spoke to a ghastly crime.
On the afternoon of July 20, someone using a waterfront trail in Alameda spotted a large garbage bag wrapped in duct tape that smelled as if it was full of dead fish from the bay. When responding officers looked inside, they found the dismembered remains of a young woman whose head, hands and feet had been removed.
THAT’S THE FUCKING POINT!
It’s entirely deliberately written to instill that thought.
And it’s not “badly written” as it is 100000000% effective in what it is meant to do.
Writing badly on purpose is still writing badly lol
Just replace “him” with “this man”, and it’s still clickbait but clearer. Or hell, just put his name there. The circumstance itself is interesting enough for an article without resorting to tricks.